I chose to do a clock, to go with a more literal feel. My days can sometimes just seem so uniform, just like clock work. Sometimes it seems like I wake up, follow this schedule, then do the same exact scheme the next day. So a clock just seemed fitting
I also chose to go with the thunderstorm because lately my days have just been so busy that it feels like there is so much coming down on my at once. The cloud it made up of the words stress because everything that adds up during my day just seems to add that much more stress. Sometimes everything can seem like so much more.
I like your second choice, the cloud, better. The first clock is simple and nice, but a little boring and honestly, the cloud is more original. There are quite a few people doing a clock. The cloud is more honest and emotional. It would be interesting to see if you, instead of outlining the cloud and filling it in with left to right straight-up lines, if you created a cloud with a spiraling interior and followed the text on that path. Maybe there is already a spiral shape that you can just modify points of so you don’t have to take all the time to create it yourself. And maybe you can also use some (…)’s in between the rain streams to give more of a literal visual of rain drops. (or check in the glyphs to see if there is a symbol that you can flip to look like a raindrop). Otherwise, nice work, a few tweeks and you should be great. It looks like you are stressed. Good thing spring break is next week:)
ReplyDeleteI like both of your compositions. They both are original and descriptive of your day and how you feel. I’m leaning towards the thundercloud though, because the clock feels unfinished and not very interesting. Perhaps if you added some more elements to it, it might work better for you. I really like the type you chose for the thundercloud. I might try experimenting with different words inside the could other than just “stress”. That might help switch it up and give it more texture and depth. Also, I would try fading the ends of the letters at the bottom of the rain and spacing them out more to give a raining effect where the letters just trail and drop off. For the clock, you might try a different type or maybe experiment with glyphs to find some sort of clock-like letter forms to use for the hands or the numbers.
ReplyDeleteOn your first idea I like that you chose to do a clock because you feel like you have repetitive days. I feel like it is a little boring to look at, maybe change your type face or just add a couple more elements to it. Maybe if you formed some kind of boundary enclosing the clock it would help unify your piece.
ReplyDeleteI think your second concept is more successful. It is different than everyone else’s project’s. It is clear what you are trying to convey. I think add more words to the “rain”, also maybe make the words smaller or vary the sizes of each word, like rain drops. No one raindrop is the same. I think you should probably use your second idea to work on further and turn in as your final piece. I am not sure you need “ALARM” capitalized or slanted. It seems like there is too much emphasis on that word, when all the words “raining” are your problems.
The literal feel of the first one is nice, but it is very jumpy, I would suggest working on the thicknesses and variations of the words… especially from “one o’clock to 6 o’clock” they just seem to have been placed on there. This would be ok, but on the other side the balance is quite a bit more balanced while maintaining –different- thicknesses.
ReplyDeleteThe second one is very well done, and easily interpreted, there is no way to miss the point behind this one. Again I would work on the thickness in the rain drops, I think you were trying to make alarm look like a lightning bolt. If not you may want to make it the same as everything else in that area, or make everything kinda crazy to help it not stand out so much. Besides that I really like this piece, it clearly depicts what you were aiming for.
Hey Kelly,
ReplyDeleteRough One: Simplicity is always, always nice. So, for that, I like this. There is a thing or two you can do to spruce it up a bit, to give it some personality. Try a Bodoni or Avant Garde typeface, or another typeface you feel suits you and your schedule. I think this is Myriad – it always looks really stretched to me, but that might just be JPG compression. Also, perhaps you could increase the size of your clock overall, allowing enough space to add the minutes between the hours. That could allow for more personalization and more visual interest. But keep it simple.
Rough Two: This is getting there. I would stray away from Myriad; try another sans serif (ITC Avant Garde could be nice for this). Perhaps try decreasing the cloud so there is more space for the “rain” to fall. Perhaps this stress rain falls into a puddle at the bottom of the composition? Also, maybe alarm, or another really stressful word, could be shaped into a lightning bolt? These ideas would decrease the simplicity of your composition, but I think if you give the text enough breathing room, you can keep the composition clean and visually intriguing.
I would say do the second one. The idea of a stress cloud is more interesting than a clock schedule.
For rough one, I understand the concept and your direction. I feel that if you are going to illustrate a clock, that you should further express the image as such. Clocks have been done before, so I believe that if you are going to use something that has been created make it your own and make it extraordinary. Make the teacher forget that anyone else has done a clock because yours stands out much more. I would suggest making the words resemble more of a clock face. You could even try to make it resemble a watch if you would like to take it farther.
ReplyDeleteYour second rough has a good concept as well. Your audience will easily identify with days like this. I would suggest adding detail in your cloud, so that it won’t look like a blob. You could try to illustrate it by overlapping text to make it darker around the rounded edges. Similar to shading but with words, so that it can have a stronger form. You could play around with different font faces to see if they may help to change the mood of the image. Also, if you wanted to have a deeper meaning to your image you could switch the words that are raining down with the words stress in the cloud. Rain clouds are created by many factors and once combined rain is produced. So, you could have everything that stresses you in the cloud and have raining stress come down, representing the combined effect of all the factors.
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Work on the cloud one more. Bring the cloud up and crop off the top so it feels more overwhelming and engulfing. Instead of sheets of rain you should loosen it up and make lots of drops of rain. Work with scale to show rain in the distance and in the foreground.
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