Both of my roughs are about the day the power went out in JCM (and elsewhere I think...) because I was in another comdes class at the time, so the teacher basically had to cancel class. I chose Futura for both because I like it and I figure if this is about MY day it should be a font that I feel represents me. Also, I don't really think there's a serifed (sp?) font that wouldn't detract from the message I was trying to get across through the composition so... Futura. I like my first rough a lot better than the second one, and I think it probably shows... Not really stuck on anything. In my first version of the top rough the block of black started further down in the composition, I think I like it in the middle better though.
I think your first design is alright however, the big black square at the bottom I think distracts from the main objective of the project which was to create expressive type that tells a story of any day you experienced. I think that you definitely need more “expressive” type. For example, the word sleepy, could actually look sleepy or convey sleepy . In other words, if I was illiterate, would the word sleepy convey sleepiness to me? Also, I feel that there is no real flow in the message like there is in your second composition. Perhaps that’s the point though. I think you would work on it more and build on it.
ReplyDeleteI like your second piece better. More expressive in nature and it tells more of a story. It definitely pulls you in and makes you want to read the words you designed in the brain. I would recommend using less repetition with the words in the background and perhaps utilize different extreme sizes and weight of the typeface. I think this would give it a nicer aesthetic and make it more interesting. I do think this is the stronger of the two and I would recommend building on your concept even more. Your choice of typeface is good two because it is very standard and makes you really work to create words that are expressive in nature. Maybe you could even write out an actual pleasant and funny dream of yours in the brain rather than just relying on repetition once again. I think this would make it fun for the reader/viewer
I think the first one uses type to create visuals very well. For example, I really like “showertime,” the “big bowl of Frosted Flakes,” “art historyblahblahblah,” and “up up up the stairs.” It really makes me feel like I’m in the mind of a college student. I can relate to it, because I too enjoy some delicious Frosted Flakes and a morning shower. The typeface works well; I think if you had used a serif font, it wouldn’t have conveyed the message as well. The white house surrounded by darkness at the bottom is an undeniably powerful image, but I’m not sure it successfully communicates a power outage. Maybe I’m a dummy, but I didn’t understand this composition until I read your description. My advice would be to keep the visual type, but work on the transition from your day going normally to the power going out and your class being cancelled.
ReplyDeleteI would stick with the ideas on the first composition, because I don’t think the second one transmits the idea of a power outage. I like the outline of the face, and the swirl of the word “daydream” really works. I think if a daydream was to be simply expressed in type, that would be a very effective image. But, it doesn’t match up with the words on the outside, i.e. “she likes you that’s why she gave you extra.” You said in your description that you like the first one better and you’re not so sure about the second one, and I think it shows a bit. The second one just feels a little unfinished and the story of the day isn’t conveyed as well. I like the first one a lot. I’m dragging on a bit here because I’m supposed to write 150 words. Banana. Airplane.