The first one is about how my days end the same way they begin with sleep and dreams and then just kind of tumble back to that over and over, the second one is coffee-centric and shows how my day goes before and after coffee through the size and weight of the text.
Drew Allen-
ReplyDeleteI like your second rough better of the two. It seems more visually interesting because of the placement of you text across the entire length of space. I think as you start out your text you could go lighter on the text to stress the idea of your day really starting after the coffee. It would feel more wake and energized after the coffee when compared to a lighter color or less bolded text.
Your first one seems less exciting. Everything is lined up together and although you get larger with the coffee it just feels very much the same. It also seems really heavy on the left side because all your text is on one side. I think it would look more like a progression if it sort of moved forward as well. More like your second piece with how it moves from the left to the right as you describe you day more.
Just from first glance like the first one because I tend to lean towards a clean look. But after looking over your explanation I would like the second if the font before the coffee seemed a little weak. Maybe play with how everyone is “barely there” in the morning. You could make the “make coffee” and “drink coffee” a little bit larger to show its significance. OH! You could outline everything before coffee and make the fill white. I just noticed how you used that on “yawn” and “sleep” in the first one. The first one I would change the “alarm” and make it smaller so that you focus more on the coffee. Maybe you could rotate the first one counter-clockwise to where it would look like a mountain and your tallest peaks could be the COFFEE. It would be funny if you made it look like the lines on a pulse monitor and every rise would be “Coffee.” Any of these changes on these two would be sweet.
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