My first idea was to show the different bags, backpacks, and cases i use and carry as i go to my different jobs and classes throughout the day
My Second ieda was to show someone doing gymnastics on the highbar as gymnastics club takes up a big part of my day
For your first rough (highbar), the concept is a good idea. I had a little trouble figuring out what it was when I initially looked at it. At first glance I thought it was a person tripping on a hurdle while running on the track. I would suggest using an entire body form and show the person holding onto the bar, flipping around it. If that is successful, you may not even need to include the runway/mat beneath the bar.
ReplyDeleteFor your second rough (bags), I initially saw a coffee cup before I read the description. It is a great concept… I would just suggest using some glyphs and different styles to add details to the bags and maybe playing with the placement. I don’t think they need to touch. Do you carry any other bags? I think if you had three bags, the layout would work even better.
I really enjoyed the gymnastics dude. It was so cute and I totally understood the premise. Without the motion lines, I don’t think I would have understood the concept of the illustration. The simplicity in the stick figure definitely makes it look clean. I also love that you doubled up the lines on the stick figure’s body and the way you used that wavy line perfectly depicts movement, which is very hard to pull off. The feet have a cartoonish look to them, which is really cute. I’ll be honest, I have no clue how I would make it better lol. Perhaps if you were to replace the vertical lines you used for feet with some short waves of bold text going slightly diagonal the feet would look a bit more realistic. It’s a great concept.
ReplyDeleteI think if you were to separate the two bags, the image would be easier to grasp. The angle is very interesting and daring. Once I read the description, the image became a lot easier to comprehend but I think that can be fixed with a mere rotation and spacing of the image. I thought you were real creative with the way you showed the difference between the two bags with the bold/regular fonts. It has a ying yang feel to it, which makes the illustration captivating.