This is an account of what goes through my head when I get up and on my way in the morning for class. The 2nd one includes an attempt at a tree on the right side, but I am really considering leaving it out.
Sunday, September 27, 2009
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Interesting composition. I like how you used the word “hurry!” as handrails. It really leads my eye in and makes it all appear very 3-D. I would move the largest “gotta get to class” up a bit so that the “g” isn’t cut off. I also like the fading of the paragraph, though it’s a bit hard to actually read it. Did you flip it on each side of the walkway?
ReplyDeleteBe careful on how it’s aligned. After looking at if for a bit, I find that the main part of the building with the windows isn’t centered. The handrails meet up with the building at different uneven points and now that I see it, that’s all I can look at. Try altering the angles at which they sit.
The tree is an interesting idea. To keep the composition flowing, you might want to have the tree be spread out more, the symbols playing more on the wind. Try and combine the two works for how you use the empty area.
Nice! I like the different variations of stroke on some words both of your roughs. I am more drawn to the top one because I feel like there is better balance in the composition with the bold and finer words. I would definitely work with the top one. Although, I would like to see something in the background, maybe that’s why you felt the necessity of putting the tree there. The tree is nice there but I feel like it takes attention away from your center subject because the tree is so bold. You should just make an outline of the tree with just type, and use your T path tool to make the outline. Some minor things would be that at the top of the roof the D is behind the P, it kind of throws me off because it doesn’t feel proportionate. U should just elevate it a little and center it. Now, the top part of the stairs looks awesome, but the bottom half seems like there is to much negative space., maybe you could make another diagonal line of text along the other line of the edge of the stairs. Minor corrections, Great Job
ReplyDeleteThanks both of u!
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