With the image of the phone, its about my day when I work at a call center. I spend about five hours on the phone so it takes up a large amount of my day. On the second one its about walking around campus. I don't have a car so I walk pretty much everywhere and to and from my apartment to Mitte at least three times a day. Plus walking to everything else around here it really adds up.
I think my favorite would be the top one. It’s an interesting way to show how your day progresses. I’m not sure what the significance of the figure 8. The composition seems to be unbalanced. The combination of thick and thin letters work very well help your composition flow. Also, the way the phrases are wavy help this too.
ReplyDeleteIt’s a very creative way to create shoes. I think you should use up more of the blank space in your composition. Maybe have it more chaotic, not in such straight lines.
You came up with a really creative way to make a phone. I really like how you made the cord. It’s kind of static. I want to see more emotion. The way you separate your day is really interesting. I think the square edge of the phone needs to be thicker, and maybe you could skew it to make it seem more three-dimensional.
Out of the two, I think my favorite one is the top one. It’s a very simple idea and way to express how your day progresses. However, I really don’t get the figure eight structure. All I get from that is that you are literally walking around in circles all day’ If you are trying to convey how you walk around to and from everywhere, I think the foots should be more chaotic. As in, I think they should go sort of all over the place. I enjoy the words moving through the footsteps and how they are of different size. With the bolder words I think you should orient the feet in a sort of stop and go sort of motion that way I get more of a sense of you going to and from places.
ReplyDeleteWith the second rough, I love the idea and like how you made the phone and phone cord. I also enjoy the brackets above the words coming out of the phone. I really get a feeling of people yelling or whining over the phone. The words progressively getting larger as they come from the phone is great too. I do think, however, that there should be more definition to the phone base. Maybe change the bold fonts on the left side to less bold or make them smaller. To me it looks more like a symbol than where the phone receiver goes.