This one conveys my 21st birthday. I wanted to go for a bit of humor in this one, along with simple text and a simple image to get my message across. Kids, be careful.
This one is an early memory: When I was a kid, I went to the top of the Empire State Building and chucked a penny off when my Mom wasn't looking. I immediately regretted this, and I worried for days about the idea of accidentally killing someone. Once again, Kids, be careful.
Your first design is pretty funny and of course, many people can identify with it. However, I feel it lacks “expressive” type. The word puke stands out and that’s about it . Perhaps instead of just relying on repetition of the phrase “Let my buy you a drink” you could have designed shot glasses lined across a bar made out of the liquors name or the drinks name along with a beer mug. I think it does have great potential but its too plain at this point. The typeface you used I think was a good choice just because its clean and easy to use. Also, perhaps use letters from the word puke in different weights and sizes and place them around the word puke to make it look like the bits and chunks from puke. Sounds gross but it might add to the expressiveness of the word.
ReplyDeleteYour second design is pretty cool too. I would recommend trying to write out your childhood story to look like the empire state building and perhaps at the top crest of the building ,you could rely on a little bit of repetition of the phrase “Empire State Building.” I think this would add more to the piece and in the end make it more interesting. Also, it will pull the reader/viewer in to your art. The penny falling with the trailing phrase it great though! I would pick this design because there is more of a unique story behind it that you can build on. (Make clouds and birds out of type too, just an after thought.)
I like your concepts on both of these, but I think the first one has maybe a little more potential. Both of these could use a little more variety as far as the words go. I can’t really think of anything you could change with the empire building one except maybe the word in the building could be how it felt going up to the top or your day in New York up until that point, but it might not be immediately obvious that it was the empire state building. But I guess the urban legend of dropping a penny off a tall building would still come to mind. It’s not like that’s not obviously a penny, haha…
ReplyDeleteWith the first one I think you could keep the face but maybe make a puke looking shape of a bunch of drink names or something (or mayyybe put the “happy 21st birthday in the puke shape?”). I also think it might be good to add some other words/sentences to the block of text on the left… I do like the idea of it being repeated a bunch of times, like millions of people are buying you drinks, but I think you could scale it down some and still get the point across? As it is, it looks more like he (or you I guess lol) is yelling “puke!” and not actually puking.