The two compositions below are both laid out with Baskerville. The story behind the two compositions is the idea of trying to cope with the millions of different thoughts going through my head.
I want something in the back ground of this one, but I'm not sue what. Also, I feel like I should have done it in a bunch of individual letters rather than in whole words.
This one gives off a much more organized feeling, yet the clogged background and over crowded mind still convey the feeling of being overwhelmed.
Andrews critique:
ReplyDeleteThis was probably one of my favorite ones I saw. The balance of the use of words and image with the contrast of the plain white background is what grabbed my attention. I know you said you wanted individual letters in the mind, but I like the whole words because it gets me to look at it closer and read stuff. Other wise it would have been just letters and not a schedule of your day. The face seems to have that feeling of coping or melancholy, maybe I would like to see more shadows in the outline of the eyelids or under the eye giving an impression of bagged eyes, like the corner of the head gives it major dimension and looks really great. Maybe mirror that same-jumbled words on the bottom right corner fading up. In the second rough the BIG BLACK text is a bit overwhelming to the eye and not overwhelming to the figure, but then again it works in a way, maybe some text running on top of the face would fit better, I wish we were able to use shades of black so it can look further in the background. As far as using either rough I really like your first one.
I prefer the first composition, but the words are hard to read. The face looks more real than the second one. The arrangement of the words gives a sense of 3D like if the head is round. Maybe you can work more on the shades to emphasize the features of the face. Also, on the right corner of the background you can write other words to fill the white space. In the second rough, the whole word makes the head and face look flat. The face doesn’t have any shadows and looks simple. Also, in the background the big words overwhelmed the composition. I believe the first composition is working more effective than the second one.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the concept of your roughs I think that overall they are both very well executed but I prefer the first one more. I like the jumbled up words, they really give a sense of overwhelming thoughts swirling through your head. I also really like the fact that they continue down to make the neck and body. I think in your second one the head is just kind of detached and floating. I like that you used whole words and not just letters, to me that is more interesting that I can really look and pick out the words in there, otherwise it’s not really a schedule. I do like the background of the second one and I would be interested to see what your first one would look like with that background, I think you should play around with that. As far as the second one goes, I like it but it just looks too organized with all the words going either horizontal or vertical.
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