Pliego Proj3 Roughs
I decided not to list my entire schedule because on any given day it is very extensive. My days are usually non stop and about 18 hours long, no joke! I work full time, about 50 hours a week and I am taking 6 hours of class on top of that, while still trying to have a somewhat normal social life. Needless to say, the ends justify the means because i am working towards acceptance into the MFA program. I aimed to make a piece that was representative of how my current schedule makes me feel rather than just a list of events. I was really trying to use symbolism.
The design with the spray can has different "layers" in the message. everything from the spray can itself to the way I typed out my schedule on the "wall," it all conveys a specific message.
The second design is more short and to the point. The bird is on a leash, it represents what keeps me focused in my current schedule. Of course, I hold onto the leash that is tied to that catalyst that guides me throughout my hectic day that i sometimes what to escape so that at some point I can reach my goal.
First of all, let me start off by saying that I think both of these images are really great, really well done, and if you didn’t change a thing, I’d be a-okay with that. But, being forced to critique, let me nitpick a few things that you can ignore in the future =)
ReplyDeleteThe teacher’s assistant is telling me your use of gray in between the black text on the right side of the first one is a violation, though I’m not 100% sure on that. I would look into it so you don’t get points deducted. I hope you don’t have to change it because the gray text is the only thing that makes you look deeper into the black text. I personally enjoyed the use of curse words in the composition, but professors can be weird about that stuff, so I would lightly consider altering the words. It took me a minute to comprehend the message in the spray-paint idea, but once I saw the word “education” on the can, I definitely got it. The first composition is my favorite of the two.
The second one is a great image, a lot of white space, which I feel helps the viewer to really focus on the central image. My one complaint would be the bird; it looks a bit lifeless. It looks more like a slow-moving bird balloon instead of a flying creature, as weird as that sounds. I know it’s got to be really tough to portray a bird using only type, and for the most part you did a great job, but if there’d be any way to insert some motion in there, I think it would help a lot. It would kind of help with your idea of your education being a moving, animate thing.
Right off the bat, I have to say I like the first one better. The spray can is really well rendered, and I like the symbolism of change being put somewhere by education. I think the composition is good, and I understand why you didn’t in places like the can and the wall, but I wish you had used more actual sentences or words. Even if they were repetitive I think it would be a positive change. Like, each brick in the wall could be the same paragraph or something. I almost wish the hand had been done in the same way as the rest of the composition, just to be a little more consistent, but that’s something I think I’d have to see to make a judgment on. Like, I kind of think it might blend in with the can if you did that… It’s just an idea, not something that I would ever say you NEEDED to change; the parentheses are perfect for the shape of the fingers, I’m just saying it looks like a different style.
ReplyDeleteI think I’m not as much of a fan of the second one because it’s more obvious that you didn’t use very many real words or sentences. Also the kid is sort of in between a silhouette and an actual shaded rendering like the paint can in the first composition. I think if anyone were to guess which one you spent more time on or looked more finished they would say the first one, and that’s always a good thing ☺ (sorry this was so long!)