My day explains the events of my trip up Pike Peaks mountain in Colorado. The first picture is from a photo of me laying on a frozen over lake. To me that symbolizes the time I had becasue it is cold and calm. It was relaxing and beautiful. The second picture is two mountians with a figure at the bottom in negative space. This represents the vastness of the mountain compare to the figure and it also represents the cold as well.
In your first image, I get that the person is lying down but without reading your comments I wouldn’t have known it was a frozen lake. At first glance, I think it looks more like a person lying at the foot of a mountain. You say it was relaxing and beautiful but I don’t get that from your font choice. Did you try using italics? I do think of snow because of all the white negative space. I like the second image, but I don’t think of mountains when I look at it. Did you try making the top more pointed, maybe with upside down v’s? I think it would look good to see more mountain, maybe snow capped. Try less negative space and see what it would look like in white, with the mountain black. The little figure isn’t little enough to compare vastness, I feel that he is standing next to a small hills. Try having the mountains peak at the top of the page, maybe even have some of the peaks off the page.
ReplyDeleteOn your first composition I did not see you laying out on a frozen lake without reading your comments. My immediate thought when I saw this was some sort of map, to be honest, and the second was someone watching a trail of bugs or something – like fireflies – going through the air. I do like how you shaped the person, and I can kind of see the long lines as skis maybe, and the ‘d’s as thumbs up. It’s a very neat way to make a person. As for the rest, I’m not sure how to tell you to make it look more like a frozen river other than possibly filling in the white space some more or adding a bank so that one gets the feel of a river.
ReplyDeleteThe second composition poses the same problem as the first – I do not immediately see mountains. Even with the help of your explanation I have a hard time seeing said mountains. I see something more like a night sky and some sort of pass or canyon, maybe even trees, but not mountains. I like your idea of using a negative space figure to showcase the largeness and vastness of the mountains though. I’d keep that in there.
Overall I think you have good ideas, but need to adjust your approach to each one to make the idea more obvious to the viewer.