This semester I do a lot of commuting so I wanted to represent that by illustrating a car. I wanted to show that it makes me tired and I wanted the car to look in motion by the way I expressed the type. I chose futura because I wanted something without serif's and I thought it worked well. I'm just wondering if I need more words/letters in the composition?
I like the car composition the best, but try refining the car shape. Looks a little messy right now. Try using a smaller font and more wording, bring out some detail.
ReplyDeleteKim, I chose the car as your strongest piece (actually among the strongest in the group at first glance!) So My opinion would be to go with that one. I like how it looks like its breaking through the air, like a car does (duh). But you executed the idea really well. The only thing I would say about it is that you should give it something to drive around. You could add some road signs, some trees or something along those lines. Then again, it looks pretty awesome the way it is now. Try the other stuff, if it doesn’t jive then its still your strongest one.
ReplyDeleteI really like where you are going with this. I think in order to make it look more like a car you could add some tires, trees, road signs, air that comes out of the exhaust pipe, windshield… stuff like that. I think it would also be cool if you described more of your day when you are driving to school, how you are feeling. Are you frustrated? Are you annoyed? Are you jamming out on your radio/ipod? Do you take the bus? Is parking horrible? Stuff like that you could think about. Another thing is maybe minimizing your font so you can add more detail in the car. I think this compostion is your strongest and I think that if you add a little bit of touches to the car and to the detail in the back it would be awesome!
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