In a nutshell i had a very bad day where my alarm did not go off which made me late to a critique. Then i got a call that my brother broke his leg. On my way to get my brother i was pulled over for speeding. It was a very bad day to be perfectly frank. My first composition is supposed to be a tidal wave just coming through and destroying what was once a normal day. I ended up going with futura font in booth my compositions because i liked the way it looked as a tidal wave. Also in my second composition which is a drain sucking all the bad things that happened away. I used futura in this composition as well because i needed a perfect symmetrical O to make the drain. This composition really appeals to me because at the t=end of that day i took a really long shower which felt great to just wash all the bad things away.
I’m not so sure if the exact ideas are conveyed clearly through the images. But, I do like the concepts. Maybe the tidal wave could just be a little more detailed and emphasized. Maybe you could make the words smaller in the tidal wave, and use more of them so that when you stand back you see the outline of the wave better. It also may be interesting in black and white. The drain image could maybe use some more type winding on down or maybe you could make some water droplets getting sucked down. I like the way things are placed in both; a little asymmetrical to make it more interesting. And I think the type is appropriate in the drain image; maybe the tidal wave could use a type that’s more fancy. But, these are all just a few suggestions. I like what you’ve done so far; I definably like the tidal wave idea. For some reason it reminds me of a Chinese style tidal wave picture; maybe you could do something like that.
ReplyDeleteYour first rough does view as a tidal wave but maybe if there were a few splashes coming out from it where the waves are crashing into each other would create the illusion of more chaos. You could add more variation of the size of the words, but simplicity could be what works in the end for this composition. If you get too crazy with the letters the image might lose its form. Your second rough could use a bit more depth to it. If there were small words coming in from the edges of the composition overlapping more and more as you move toward the drain it would look like the drain is further down/away from the viewer. You could keep the large spiraling words, but maybe make the drain a tiny bit smaller and possibly offset it from the center of the composition. It could also be reversed out so that the type has a thin stroke and the drain black to make it look a little more sinister. I really like this idea.
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