EDIT: I don't know why it came out so pixely! I've tried probably 10 times to re-save and re-upload them. I save it right. Exactly like the instructions say. :/
My day is the day I was in Chicago over the summer.
Both of my compositions are the skyline of Chicago. The first one is just the skyline alone and blown up just a tid bit more, and the second is with an airplane incorporated. I chose Century Gothic as my typeface because I felt like it had that Chicago feel t it. It was the closest I could get to the typeface of the Chicago Theater and it was easy to get different variations of font weight.
I realized after I finished that I had a little problem with the scale. It may be too small, but, while I was creating them it was hard to tell that on the screen.
I'm also not too sure about the scale of the airplane and words "fly" trailing behind it. maybe smaller?
You are defiantly on the right track, Amber. Overall I feel that you made good decisions as far as your concept and font go. I think that the top image is better as a whole. The plane and “fly fly fly” don’t add very much to the composition where you have them placed, and I feel that the “fly fly fly” actually disrupts the tower. With that being said, the top image has that big open white space in its top right corner. You could try placing an airplane in that area either flying left, or maybe even flying into or out of the image. Another thing I’m wondering about is if there could be variety amongst the trees, and maybe something actually in the water. I think that would help break up the repetition at the bottom. I’m not exactly sure why the image is pixilated. Also you may want to ask about using three days instead of one just to make sure you won’t lose points for that. You’re doing great, keep working.
ReplyDelete-Ryan Lewis
Both pieces stand out to me (good job with the skyline!) Its easy to tell what each form is in both of the compositions. I like the second composition initially a little more because I feel like the plane adds a little more complexity to the over all piece. On both compositions I wouldn’t change anything except maybe seeing how some smaller text would look for the “fly fly” trail as you suggested in your description.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I’m not sure I really understand the concept of either. If your concept was just to show how fun you had on your trip to Chicago then I believe the second one was more successful. The plane adds a whimsical feel. Or if you wanted to just convey how much you did and how busy the day was, either one works well. The second one however adds the element of you flying there and back, which adds even to the “busy” concept. Over all I believe the second one is conceptually and compositionally stronger than the first.