Both my posts talk just about a normal tuesday or thursday of mine. My font is Times, it's just a straight up font with nothing exciting to it, just like my day. Most of my time is spent waiting, counting the minutes until my next class, or next event. So i've put up the amount of seconds I waste just sitting around. I've made the seconds bigger or bolder to show more importance than what i'm actually doing. Now i'm not exactly sure how I should go about laying out everything. Whether I should show some empty space in between what i'm doing or keeping the time in between them and just taking up lots of space. Hopefully we'll have some other ideas tomorrow :)
I like the first one more than the second because it seems more dramatic with the bold type choice. You might want to work with the spacing because right now (and I’m not sure if it’s intentional) in the beginning of the day there’s far less space for your commentary text to exist in and it almost seems crushed between the time stamps, while in the later activities there seem to be too much space, creating awkward look for the compression of the overall space. Also, you might want to work with several arrangements of the timestamps, rather than just centered which leaves a lot of white space on the sides and a rather static image. Maybe have it start as a traditional time line going from left to right and then progressing down — varying the size of the type as the events get more important.
ReplyDeleteFirst post: I really like your idea. I think the seconds work well and are interesting. I also like how everything is aligned in the middle. It makes sense to place it that way because its like a time line and using the brackets looks good when they are stacked. The text in the middle needs to be more consistent. The spacing in the first 3 look good. I also feel like they need to stay together as a group. Keep the 108000 up with all the rest.
ReplyDeleteSecond post: I don’t like how you organized this one. Its very boring and can get confusing when trying to read the text and align it with the seconds. Maybe some of the text can change in size or boldness whether is good or bad. But I would definitely go with your first layout
I’ll lump these both together since they seem the same just with different justifications. I would really consider using a different method of monitoring the time, I had no idea what you were talking about until I read your description; the viewer needs to understand what you are talking about just by viewing the piece. Maybe using a unit of time that is more recognizable such as minutes or hours would suffice. Honestly, I could see this being a parody of a restaurant bill or a Mastercard commercial. I would definitely keep it enter aligned, I lose interest in the latter composition. Keep evolving your idea, good luck over the break.
ReplyDeleteYour idea is interesting, but there has to be a more creative way to lay it out, even though it is straight forward and analytical. The only thing I can think of right now is laying it out as a graph maybe? Maybe a bar graph with the bars filled with words describing thoughts and things going on in those sectioned seconds wasted. I’m not sure if that makes sense or it it’s worth exploring, but I just feel like your idea needs to be pushed further. Explore ways that time is measured and what it really going on within that wasted time. Explore how to express wastefulness and how it builds up. Also, how space and emptiness is defined. Think of time lines and how they are laid out too. Just some ideas that may help push your project a little bit in ways that may be more visually interesting.
ReplyDeleteOn the first rough I automatically thought it was a time line starting with the 1500’s then going down when they obviously were not dates and era’s I was very confused. After reading your post I get that they are seconds but that doesn’t come off right away. I like the way you kept it straight up and down, boring font, pretty boring layout, it conveys that the day is boring and routine. If you can do something else with the seconds I think it’s a good concept.
ReplyDeleteOn the second rough, I once again wonder what the numbers in the brackets are. Also maybe putting the numbers in the brackets a line bellow what you’re doing instead of straight across would look more visually appealing. Overall like the first I think there both good concepts I just feel like the whole second concept needs a little more working on and playing with. Maybe try keeping the bold numbers and brackets but then changing it so second sits bellow the numbers in a non bold font? Good luck, good job as well!
Megan,
ReplyDeleteI think the first layout is better than the second. I think it’s an interesting idea to consider the time more important than the events. Very original.
I couldn’t really figure out that the seconds were all about the time spent waiting for the next thing without reading your description. At first I thought they might be the duration of the event. I feel as though you should rework it a little bit just to give the viewer a clue of what it’s all about, so that you don’t have to describe it for it to make sense. Perhaps they could be labeled as “seconds wasted,” or something unobtrusive and simple. It needs just enough to inform the viewer, but without giving it all away.
As far as the composition goes, I think you’re on the right track with the bold/not bold how you have it. The only real problem I see is the lack of continuity regarding spacing. I think that each time and description should have equal spacing around it. I don’t think that it should start right at the very top. And everything’s not exactly centered.
Your first composition is better than your second but it still needs a lot of work I think. At first I thought this was a timeline. Then I enlarged it and realized it wasn’t. Then I thought maybe it’s military time but quickly realized it wasn’t. Then I just sat and stared at it for a while, still confused, and then I finally realized that it was seconds. I like the idea of using the seconds but I think you’re going to have to write out ‘seconds’ for it to instantly click with people. I like that it’s in a plain, big, bold font. But the other words seem too boring and too small.
ReplyDeleteThe second one is just too plain and simple and a little unorganized.
I like your idea of counting down time. Since the seconds seem to come off as a little confusing, maybe you could change it to minutes and seconds so it's a little easier to understand. Also, since when I look at it and it immediately makes me think of a timeline, that's the way you should lay it out, showing time progressing in that way. Also maybe you can vary your type sizes more dramatically so there's more visual interest.
ReplyDeleteGo with the first. I think people were having difficulty understanding wasted seconds. Perhaps at the end when you tally it up say "108000s of wasted seconds" or instead of abbreviating "s" write out seconds each time.
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