This rough represents the idea that each day I have varies dramatically from the next. I don't like to have such a strict routine. However the two things that I know will always start and end my days are waking up and going to sleep. The rest is subject to change.
This rough is a rather complicated flow chart representing various decisions I must make throughout the day. It is intentionally busy, visually unappealing, non-representational and confusing, so as to represent the very nature of my decision making. There are also no capital letters because I wouldn't consider these thoughts to be important enough to be capitalized.
I chose to use Helvetica for both of these roughs because I did not want to associate anything with it besides the letters themselves. Both works are highly unemotional, and I feel that using a font with a lot of movement or feeling or expressiveness would take away from the ideas I am trying to portray.
First I would like to agree with your choice of font and your reason for choosing it. If you feel that your days are just “days”, then the act of movement and motion shouldn’t be conveyed in any aspect.
ReplyDeleteFor your first rough, you wanted the feel to be boring, dull, and emotionless. It works well for the concept. I don’t feel strongly about this piece, but it does express what you wanted to intentionally show. The piece is just there. There is nothing there that makes you want to care for it, but again that is the direction. I do like the “* Contents may vary” statement. It adds a little humor with the dullness. It’s similar to you explaining your day and telling someone else to fill in your day. As in saying, “You tell me”.
I prefer your second rough over your first though. Even though it is plain and just there, it makes you want to read through the chart. It catches your attention and makes you curious as to what is going on. I believe the flow chart is a creative way of conveying your day. Each answer has a reply and one affects the other. You stated that your days are, for the most part, up in the air and can go anywhere. In this rough, it shows that your day can change depending on different outcomes. I feel that this piece works well with your general direction. I do not believe much, if anything, needs to be changed. You could add two more periods at the end of the second decisions. Just to make it seem as your still not sure of a decision. The period gives a sense of your done thinking. The three periods will give it a feeling of indecisiveness.
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First Idea: Very cool. I don’t really have much to say about this. I would even perhaps make it simpler by making the work ‘day’ a regular font and not bold. I would also make it a white background and black text.
ReplyDeleteSecond Idea: Yeah, this is hard to read but interesting, well, kind of. I found it interesting that you mapped out this chart but after trying to read it I lost interest. Hmmm…..I am torn about this one. I would have to say go with the first one. I like the way you made it uninteresting intentionally because it kind of works but not well enough. Also, the large ‘decisions, decisions’ might work better if the strokes were thinner. Just a thought.
Your day is kind of like mine. Wake, eat, design and sleep. Not to crazy and simple. I would say make “wake up, *, sleep” bolder and the day not bold. Maybe work with the thins and thicknesses of the letterforms to create more feelings. I like the simple layout. It really gets to the point of your day. The composition is a little boring. Work with type orientations and different places to place the text.
ReplyDeleteAs for your decisions, decisions I like where decisions, decisions is. That is good. Keep it there. It’s hard to say what needs to be done with this one. It’s all pretty self-explanatory. Keep exploring new ways to organize your play-by-play thoughts. It’s funny which is good (go get food and eat it). Maybe make the bold things bigger and brighter and have the non bold things not as big as the bold things.
Your first idea is executed well for what you wanted. I like your font style choices but I think you can make the black box go further down the page. I’m not sure what to say because it is so simple and boring, but good.
ReplyDeleteYour second rough definitely is complicated. I don’t even know what to read first, and going back to where I started, takes time. I like how it starts at the top left and goes down and right, then back left again. But I’m not sure about the huge gap on the left. Maybe you can add another link to something on the left, just make it go really far down and add something small there. I like the font as well because it doesn’t add any serifs or anything special to an “unappealing” day. I think you should move the “decisions, decisions.” Over to the left, more centered.
Good luck!
Ryan, Ryan, Ryan. What can I say to really rip into your ideas? Right to it, shall we?
ReplyDeleteThe first idea is brilliant. At first, I thought it was being lazy, but if it had more, I’d probably hate it a lot. I almost feel like the black and whites should be inverted because “Day” on a black background feels backwards. Even looks like an old school Polaroid. I’m thinking the font should be a bit thicker, not too much though.
The second one seems pretty complex. Interesting to see how many of your daily thoughts end with you eating and/or sleeping. The font works well for the unemotional feeling. I do think that you should similar endings like “eat it” should all flow to one end point, rather than showing multiple instances of it. Seems a little redundant. Same suggestion goes for “keep doing those things”. My overall thoughts? Not a bad start.
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ReplyDeleteAfter reading our summaries and looking more closely, I think both your roughs are pretty clever. The first rough is to the point, simple, and effective. I think the fact that it parodies ads in the whole “subject to change” aspect is pretty funny. Your first rough is fun because the reader can fill in anything they wan to in the second line. Though instead of “Day” at the top, maybe you could put “My day”. I do prefer the second rough to the first one because it’s a busier and it’s pretty interesting to read through all the choices of your day; Honestly, I found myself “making” choices and then reading what the outcome is. It’s personally more interesting and a person can get caught up and lost in the composition. I think the font you chose was a good choice and works well the chart. It seems like you could still add to the chart, though I know why you wouldn’t since it could get too busy real fast. All in all, I think both ideas a really good. I guess it’s up to you to decide which you like better.
First rough: Simple, feels like my days where I don’t know what I even accomplished between wake and sleep. I like the simplicity. The laziness of this makes it work. I don’t have a lot to say either about this, except that it made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteSecond Rough: I really like this concept because it gives like a mission impossible day, where you have so many choices to make and deciding which one to choose. I like how you convey your indecisiveness throughout the day. The flow chart works well, maybe make some of the words bolder or slightly larger to differentiate the “decisions” you actually made that day. I enjoyed reading this flow chart of yours, very creative idea, which works with your concept of decision-making.
Either one works!
Ok. This is tough. I like both. I like the sense of humor with the first one but there's not much to it. I like the 2nd comps flowchart computer decision vibe. I'm leaning a little more toward that because it has more content.
ReplyDeleteYou make the call. Good work on both.