The top rough is about my day running around town doing different things. I was kind of going with the look of a map, and following my crazy route all over the place. I made "home" a bigger font since that where it technically starts and ends. I used futura as my font because it is simple and kind of "fast" looking. I plan on doing a little more to it, and would love some input on what may help this.
The second rough is a combination of things that could go on in any of my days, and unfortunately all of these things have happened to me. I was going for a "dropped a bomb on my day" concept. I repeated that phrase over and over around the "explosion" to add emphasis. I would still like to play with the wording on the inside of the bomb. I will be playing with line weight and the size of the type. I used Rockwell because it is chunky and I felt like it went with my concept. I still have some tweaking to do, now that I look at it again. If you have any suggestions, feel free.
I think that your second rough is a really good concept and you have great use of glyphs. Because the center part of things going wrong is so dramatic, it might be good if the text creating the zig-zags around it (the explosion) would be your average, daily life if nothing was going wrong — your every day activity is being torn apart by this bomb of things going wrong. It would also provide more variation rather than just repeating the same phrase and with the variation in characters it would create more interesting line forms. I like the overall design with the angle you have the explosive lines coming out from, especially with the contrast from the centered upright circular shape of the bomb. You might want to try Futura for you second rough since the spiky look of the N and M could add to the explosion theme.
ReplyDeleteFirst post: I really enjoy this. The idea is awesome and I love the movement you have created. I don’t know if stacking the type in the middle is working. Try writing the letters side by side for legibility. “Home” didn’t really stand out to me so try writing that in all caps and a bigger size. I think a little extra variety would be nice but not to much, like making some of your points a bigger size.
ReplyDeleteSecond post: Really good illustration. The type in the middle also looks great with the variety of the bold. Good choice of type. I wish it wasn’t in the middle though.. maybe tilted some way. If I had to choose which one for you to do it would be your first one. I like the graphic sense it gives and it seems more creative and exciting then the bomb.
I think the concept for your first composition is good but I wasn’t sure what you were going for until I read your description. I seem to get lost inside this composition and I’m not sure which direction my eye should go. Maybe that’s how it’s supposed to be though. I think that the word “home” should be bigger because like you said, that is the starting point, and probably the end point. Right now, it doesn’t particularly stand out. I’m also having trouble reading the lines of text that connect each point on the map. I think it is because the letters are stacked vertically on top of one another. Maybe you should try changing the direction of each letter to horizontal.
ReplyDeleteI really like your second composition. It is dynamic and playful and I really like how it flows together. I feel a lot more emotion in this composition versus the first one and I think it describes “one of those days” very well. The only thing that is bothering me here are the three black squares on the bottom of the bomb, they seem to stand out more than I think they should. Maybe you could finish out the bottom of the shape with text or just show the outline of the squares rather than filling them in. Good job.
first comp: I like the concept. Iit makes me think of the stress of running all over town trying to get things done, then realizing you forgot to do that one thing when you were near the grocery store so you have to go back but then its rush hour and takes you an extra hour! Maybe you could emphasize some of the stress of it all. Im not sure the font choice works, I would try a few more different fonts before settling.
ReplyDeleteSecond comp: this is certainly your stronger comp. anyone viewing it understand what you are trying to get across. I love your usage of glyphs, I haven’t seen many people use them. The imagery is great. I would suggest that you add some other parts to your day around the bomb instead of the repeating line you currently have. I like the font choice on this one. Im not sure I like the way you stached words on top of each other, maybe just add a couple strokes instead, or make some words larger.
Hannah,
ReplyDeleteWhen I first pulled up your post I literally said, “Oh, these are cool.” And they are.
I really like the map idea, just because it’s unique, interesting and it actually makes sense. It’s a little cluttered, but I know that’s what you were going for. Definitely one of the more interesting ones I’ve seen. Honestly I don’t think you need to add anything too it. It would be cool if it could all come together to make an image, but I think that would be asking too much. The varying font weights look really cool. Everything just comes together.
I think the bomb might be a little expected, if that makes sense. It looks good, but the bomb for the bad day, and the way you drew the bomb is exactly the way I would expect a bomb to be drawn. It’s good, but it’s just nowhere near as original as the map.
Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI think this map design is really effective. It looks like some sort of astrological diagram, which in my opinion is really cool. I really don’t have much of a critique for this one. I like the font choice, and I’d be interested to see it white on a black background. Maybe try to make the line of text between movie store/book store/green house either straight, or bring out bookstore more to where it creates a point. I’m not sure on how I feel about alternating caps and lowercase in the same word…. I think I would have to see it larger to make that call. However, i love the varying weights of the text. Over all, I think it’s really great.
The second one is also pretty snazzy. It has a clear message and it makes sense because those are all really annoying things to happen to someone. It makes me think that by the end of that day, I would want to effing explode! Point being, your concept is successful. I think over slept should be at the top, and I would put “car didn’t start” on the same line of text. I don’t know if I would even use the word bomb, simply because it’s obvious that the composition is illustrating a bomb, and it is sort of redundant. Maybe use an alternative phrase…like explode/fuse out/short circuit/ etc. I think the animated aspect is great.
I’ I think that if you left these two alone, it would still be really good work. Over al though, I am more in favor of the first (map) one.
I'd go with the bomb but angle it so it's more active in the comp instead of just sitting there. Like someone hurled it at you. Grab the whole thing and rotate 15 to 20 degrees.
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