This is about my busy day at work (at a daycare) and then finally being able to get off and go swim at the green belt. I chose Gill Sans because its a smooth and relaxed font. All of my phrases are staggered inside the G to show how messy and hectic my day is. Finally, when it fills up it overflows into the calming green belt
My day at school is very structured and at times can be overwhelming. That's why I decided to place my classes in confined boxes. They also look like tabs for a notebook. I chose Baskerville because it has a stern feel and it stands out strong. Relax is at the bottom peeking out because its not a big option to choose from in my day.
I like this composition but I think it needs to fill a little more space at the top of the space. You could make the G bigger which would also push the reen belt to the right. You could also try another font that has a taller G to push it to the top. I like that everything in your day is crammed inside the G and spills out. Showing how everything you do is leading to the end result of relaxing in the Green Belt. Looking at this, I understand that being in the Green Belt is the most important part of your day.
ReplyDeleteI like that the second idea looks like tabs in a folder. It’s almost too simple though, because there are only four things going on. The three classes on the tabs should have more white space underneath them.
I think your first design is a lot stronger than the second one.
I think your first composition is much stronger than your second one. You really get the feeling of chaos and stress from the overlapping packed words. I also like the fact that the G is sticking off the page, adds some interest and weight to it. Also the mass of words looks like water about to overflow, which is nice. Perhaps make the entire thing a little bigger to take up more room on the page.
ReplyDeleteOn your second one I think the words need to be a little farther from the bottom of the tab, they are a little too close and it’s a little distracting. Maybe if you had more tabs it would look more chaotic and stressed, instead it look like you have 4 things to do. Perhaps even leave out relax completely. Also the words Color Theory is a tiny bit too big for the tab.
I really like the concept of the first one. I would take away the type that sort of outlines the top of the G and just have all the text fill up inside the bowl. And on that note, maybe look into making the text more curved, like using the type-on-a-line tool on a wavy line. This could make it look more like a liquid and like it’s filling up. Try moving “belt” to the right a little bit so it doesn’t take on the G like “reen” is supposed to.
ReplyDeleteI like the second design. It makes me think of a filing cabinet. How did you make the folders? Make sure you’re only using type. You should try making the tabs staggered like they would be in an actual filing cabinet, and move “relax” to the back since it’s an unlikely option. Think about adding more “folders” to your schedule, like what you do between class, after class. Explore more into this one.
I like your first rough. It is really great that you are using the G as the pool. I totally get this concept. I think that the G needs to come in just a bit so that the inside of the G outline is all the way in the composition. I like that it breaks off the page, but I feel like the water could drain out because it is not enclosed visually. You may also want to play with the word belt. It reads to me a Gbelt… just because the reen part is directly above it to read Green. I may be over analyzing, but maybe moving belt out a little would separate that confusion.
ReplyDeleteOn the second composition I did not really get that they were tabs until I read your blog. I read this as being very organized which is what you were going for, but I feel like it needs more. Maybe depicting some kind of chaos in the background would help the feeling of order in chaos. It might help your concept so that the organization is really the only thing that gets you through the day. Over all nice job!
On the first rough I didn’t quite get that the letter was over flowing until your clam again, I get that its filling up but the over flow affect isn’t necessarily archived here. I think the text you chose is effective and the filling up of the letter is a cute idea because of the pool/water connection. If you could somehow actually achieve the over flow affect I think this is a great simple yet fun idea. Good job!
ReplyDeleteOn the second rough your idea comes across clear, the tabs of a notebook and then relax being a tab an not one that you really have time to get to. If you want something simple and straight to the point with out the viewer having to do any work this is it. Class class class maybe relax. It conveys how most art students feel at this time so I really connect with it and appreciate it.
For your first rough, I can definitely see the stress of your day, however I cannot see the resolution at the end of the day. Maybe the words could be diving into a figurative pool? ☺ Also, watch out about making the G so big and still having it connected to Green Belt. I’ve run into the same problem with some projects. The G becomes so large, it turns into an image of itself and you lose the whole word. So what I see is “G” and “reen belt” not “Green Belt”. I would go ahead and use another “g”……..”g”. What also would be pretty cool is if the words about your day actually portrayed waves in a pool.. Good Luck!
ReplyDeleteI like the first one a lot. I immediately got the imagery. The ‘G’ seems a little too far to the left though. I think you should pull it over a bit more as well as up a little more. But I like the font choice.
ReplyDeleteThe second one isn’t nearly as strong. But I can clearly tell they’re tabs and I get your concept quickly that relaxing isn’t really an option and school takes up all your time. I think relax should stay small but bring it up and put it in the center like the others.
Thanks everyone for the advice. Very helpful
ReplyDeleteDon't type around the edge of the "G". Keep the words floating and swirling inside the "G" and then let a few escape as you escape to the greenbelt. Break up some of the sentence in to groups of letters instead of lines of text. It get's too raw spaghetti like make it more fluid and loose. Separate the words into separate text objects and stack around.
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