My Best day was a saturday couple of years ago when I went to my first Texas Longhorn Football game. Where they played their rival Red Raiders. I remember seeing burnt orange everywhere it looked so beautiful. It looked like a sea of burnt orange flowing into the stadium all at once, with a few little sprinkles of black and red from the Raider fans. The actual game was pretty good to either team didnt really have a defense so it was more of an offensive high scoring game. The Raiders couldnt keep up with the Longhorns offense and Texas ended up outscoring them 59-43.
I see we got a football fan here, a longhorn one at that. Cool deal, me too. Both of these ideas are really interesting. The visual aspect of both of them are very loud, exciting and explosive, like a football game. The first one is really cool in the way that you have everything longhorns and everything good directing your eyes and beating down on the raiders. Keep this idea and maybe elaborate a tad more. Like, if you were at the game, you should say something about the crowd going wild or how if felt to be in that crowd watching that game. I’ve been to a few longhorn games and that shit is intense. It would definitely go well with the explosive looking text. Same with the second. The same thing just shifted to the middle is also very powerful, visually. I like how the teams are both side by side like a head to head thing. One thing though, the font might be two different kinds. You can definitely get the same effect with one font.
ReplyDeleteBecause both of these compositions are about the same day, I’m torn between the two. Because you made the Texas Longhorns so big in the first design it emphasizes their win against the Raiders. But I really like the symbols in the second composition.
ReplyDeleteThe first composition really shows the victory and the excitement of the win over the Raiders. It shows everything about the day going into the defeat of the Raiders.
In both ideas I would like to see the Texas Longhorns typed in a font that looks like it does in real life, it shouldn’t be italic.
Looking at them both, I think the second design looks more lighthearted and fun than the first one. One thing that is bothering me is that “FRIENDS” is upside down but everything else can be easily read. In your explanation you said that you enjoyed seeing the sea of orange but you didn’t use it in your design, maybe you could fit that in somewhere.
Your post was very difficult to find, please use tags and the rules for your post name. Anyway, I like your first one more than your second one, it shows the raiders being attacked from all sides by your day and the longhorns. I kind of wish you had brought more football imagery into it, but the first one gets the job done. In your second composition the word friend is upside down for no reason, you may want to flip this back. Also we are only supposed to use one font family, both of your images have san serif and serif fonts in them. Beautiful (in beautiful turf) should not be capitalized unless that type of turf is called Beautiful turf. You also have a few other words capitalized for no reason so I would be careful and double check everything.
ReplyDeleteI like how the Longhorns are crushing the Raiders in the first composition. I don’t think the lines are very necessary, but the symbols are a nice touch. Maybe try to have more text, more about how you felt even. You could try more symbols, spaced out more.
ReplyDeleteThe second one is great too, how both teams are going head to head. If you’re going to put something in the middle of both, however, quotation marks probably aren’t your best bet. Maybe an asterisk or a plus sign. I would also try putting nothing between them, just have them push right up into each other. Same thing with the first, I wouldn’t use lines. Some of the words seem to be randomly capitalized; I can’t figure out if there is a reason for them to be or not. Either capitalize all the first letters or capitalize only the first letter of the first word. Or try no capital letters.
Also, you can only used one type family. Keep that in mind when you rework these.
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ReplyDeleteThis whole thing seems like an interjection to me. I like the explosive movement, and the strong diagonals. It certainly fits the occasion of the event you are portraying. I really don’t know what else to say, everything is pretty straightforward.
Something you need to fix:
You have more than one typeface family being used here. According to the guidelines, you are only allowed one family, so I’d fix that. If you don’t, be prepared to be docked points for it.
You also don’t have your project correctly named or tagged, you might want to start looking at the tracs page for instruction on how to correctly go about doing things.
Other than some mistakes in protocol, I feel like you’re pretty close to completion. I would just play around with it a little, fix your violation, and see what other compositions you can come up with.
I like the 1st one with the collision of the longhorns in the corner. You need more symbol/punctuations to show conflict (!@#$%). Use only one typeface. You can still have visual variation if you play with scale and boldness or italic. Breakup/stack the letters of red raiders in the corner to fill up the corner. That way it looks like it's being squished into the corner.
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