I went to Dubai over Thanksgiving break to visit my mom, because she works for Aim Group a travel agency that subcontracts with Flur and KBR. My experience was life changing, I was a minority and my bias judgments about the Muslim, Arabic, Islamic cultures are now gone, since I explored this new world. GO visit this country!
My days are always filled with studying, running, organizations, etc. I never sleep, but I will sleep when I am dead. I always stressed, fear of what is after college, and expectancy from my family and myself. I have friends and relationships that I worry about but in the end I want to put myself first and get my education!
Its very obvious from the first observation that you are way more excited about the first one then the second, so I would say, stay with what you are most passionate about. I like how you made a little cityscape with the letters. I would however, like to see more then just a city outline filled in with letters… is there a way for you to create more of a landscape with the words and maybe some glyphs? I’ve never been there, but maybe just a contour in the foreground? Like hills, or smaller buildings? The skyline looks great but if feels like you just gave up and filled the bottom fourth with words. Maybe you could use some repetition of words in a string together to create a form, like typing on a path or something. The rays on the sun confuse me. I don’t know why you wrote “very hot” and also used the tilde. I would choose one. I honestly prefer the words. You could make the letters fatter and thinner to create a ray illusion.
ReplyDeleteI love the first design. The city built of type idea is awesome! The type makes it look busy and growing…just like Dubai. The heat from the sun works great. Your buildings look great. The pyramid building is especially cool. I f you outline the buildings with type they might stand out more. The bridge at the bottom and the way it leads to Dubai is great. I think some of the words at the bottom of the city, like sand dunes and camels could have more action or maybe I just want them to be shapes too. That might be too much though.
ReplyDeleteThe second design with the hair dryer is a cool image. I don’t see how it represents the stress your going through though. Maybe its not supposed to represent stress maybe just the beginning of a day. Either way it looks great! I really enjoy the ~ used as air.
First and foremost, both concepts are illustrated very well. The first concept, I would have to say, is my favorite. I really do like the way you created the skyline of Dubai and the overall feel/theme. It makes the audience want to visit. This could easily be used for an ad to a foreign country. Besides the landscape, the words show a sense of emotion and makes the audience further understand how excited and inspired you were on your trip. The only thing I would suggest would be working with the letters below the landscape. It doesn’t feel the same as the movement of the upper portion of the page. Other than that, I really do like the feel of this rough. I want to visit Dubai one day and this made me want to check it out even more.
ReplyDeleteYour second rough is great as well though. You worked hard on both and came up with two very strong concepts. I really like the meaning of this one. It is expressive of your daily schedule but is more meaningful to the way you picture your life. It gives off a strong deep feeling that goes beyond the image to me. My only issue was that I didn’t know what the image was off right off. I was confused and ended up cheating to figure it out, but after I did I understood the image much more. This is a very strong piece. I would just suggest adding a little more detail to explain the hair dyer better.
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I am very interested in the first composition! I like all of the words you included, as well as all the short blurbs you included. I didn’t really understand what the second picture of words is supposed to be it looks like a blow dryer? If it is a blow dryer, I don’t really understand what that has to do with what you were trying to say with that. On the first composition I like how Dubai is the first thing my eye goes to and everything around explains your experience and what it was like for you. My composition included animals, so I really like that you included “CAMELS.” The sunrays are a bit heavy for my eye, and I bounce back and forth between that and “Dubai.” You could possibly make the rays essentially the same way you made the text on top about “Traveled across…” They would be less of a distraction, however all in all I really like what you have created. Also, just enough words are bolded and stand out. I like that not everything is the same weight. Very well done, and I’m glad that you enjoyed your trip, and that your bias judgments are gone.
ReplyDeleteOk, so in my opinion, the first is much stronger and seems more interesting... that being said, I'm going to only talk about it. I like the whimsical feel it has. The leaning lines and semi-sloppy placement of letters seems unintentional, but I think it works. The symbols you chose are great. I feel like they help to intensify the foreign feel that you are getting across. I especially like the little letter openers. Another thing I would like to comment on is the choice of font. The serifs just look good.
ReplyDeleteAs for suggestions, I really don’t know what to tell you. I feel like it’s not complete by any means, but I’m not sure what it needs. If I were you, I would take a nice long look at it and try to make the placement of the below text more visually appealing. That’s all I’ve got for you.
I LOVE this idea and composition. I think it is really personal to you and you can see it in your image. I like how the type makes the buildings and monuments. I like how you used glyphs to show the crosses on the top of the towers? It is way better than just using a cross. I do think that the structures could be straighter. They tend to lean a little and aren’t straight. If the buildings were just straight I think the composition would be perfect!
ReplyDeleteI think this one exemplifies your daily schedule better, but I was confused by the image. I wasn’t sure what the image was and had to see what everyone else said. Now that I see it’s a hair dryer I totally see it! Although I am confused as to why it’s your image. I don’t think it explains your busy stressed schedule that well, unless you are showing what you do in the beginning of your day every morning, then that’s great! Maybe explain the hair dryer a little more in your composition.
Lindsay,
ReplyDeleteI think that you have two pretty strong compositions that both work in they’re own ways. I think your first concept it great, and I love the way you make the city out of the words and symbols. It seems like you have a lot of passion about this one and that you had fun making it. I like the boldness of “DUBAI” and the rays coming off of the sun. I like the layout of the buildings and the different sizes and shapes you decided to make them. It pulls me in and makes me want to read all of the words to see a little bit about how your trip was. I think it is an overall good composition.
The second composition is also a good one. I like how you have the hairdryer tilted on the pages and once again the boldness of the outer part of it. The only suggestion I would make it maybe have more words in the pile at the bottom right. It would make the comp. more balanced if there were some bold words thrown in the pile with the others, because there are a few bold words that are falling. I would also maybe make the words that are connecting the bold symbols of the hairdryer either a little bolder or bigger to make them stick out a little more.
I think you should choose the first comp. for your final, It is very intriguing and definitely a personal idea.
The hairdryer doesn't really read well. Looks kind of like a bomb or a jellyfish. I would go with the Dubai comp. Try and work on the buildings more. Really define the Burj Al Arab building (the one that looks like a sail) That's a prominent landmark in their cityscape. The sun is a bit cartoony. I would rethink the way you depicted the sun.
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