My concept is that every day I read a lot, so i tried to reflect this is my schedule. in the first picture i have quotes from a book i recently read spread throught my day. the second one is my schedule over the tiny word read over and over again (thats the lines)its hard to tell at this size. i chose helvetica because of its ease in reading. im kinda stuck on what to do for the first picture so suggestions would be welcome.
I think the second composition is the best. An idea is maybe incorporate the quotes that you used in the first composition into your second composition. With the word “read” just in random places you could also place the quotes into the background. Your main schedule is working well with the word places to the side and in the large outlines. I do not think you need to capitalize the word “read”, it messes with the viewers eye and kind of make the text look like waves at a distance. Also. If you put the quotes in the background maybe you could make them bold and bigger than the word “read” to bring attention to the viewers eye, or to just make the quotes look like they are popping out of a page of a book. Your first composition reminds me of a poem, so if you wanted to go with the first composition maybe you could use a font and arrange it in a way that resembles a poem from a book.
ReplyDeleteFor the first rough I feel like I’m looking at a poem so maybe you could switch up the font because I don’t feel like the font reflects the piece. I think a flowier font (yes I just made that word up) would work best, so maybe a serif of some sort? You could put the quotes in italic and the schedule in regular? The second rough I feel like the repeated “read” looks like waves because of the capital R. If it were lowercase I think it would look more like lines from a book. You could include some of the quotes from your first piece to make it really look like a passage from a book. If you want to go the route of looking like a passage from a book I would take out every other line so there is some sort of spacing or change the font. I really like your composition and concept for both of your roughs.
ReplyDeleteOn the first one I like the idea of reading, but when I first read it I thought you had just gone through a bad break up or totally in love with someone? So maybe read incorporated in there would make the concept of reading and book quotes come across easier. Maybe you can make an outline of a book through type, an open book and the schedule goes on one side while the quotes are the pages on each side going vertical? The quotes are cute though, maybe putting the author at the end would make the reading concept come across more.
ReplyDeleteOn the second one I like what you did, with the black on white. Overall same with the first one I think it’s a great idea (I read a lot as well). It does come across more clear than the first, but I enjoy reading the quotes in the first one much more than just read over and over. I think your off to a great start, if you want to stay simple and clean with just font no pictures out of font I defiantly think you should go with the second one. Good job!
I definitely think you should choose a livelier font. Your daily schedule is kind of boring and I think making your love for reading the main subject is a better route to take. Maybe instead of talking about how reading is an important part of your day tell a little story about how it’s been important your whole life or something. Maybe make some imagery with a book or something using the quotes and your own story. Because right now my first thought reading this is that you’re busy daydreaming of some boy all day long.
ReplyDeleteYour first composition with the quotes I think has more potential. I don’t care for the stroke on your words and again I think Helvetica is the wrong choice for this. Before I read your description and enlarged the image I thought you were trying to convey that you were drowning in your daily schedule. It really looks like waves. It’s kind of cool actually if that’s the direction you want to take.
I am interested more in your second rough. In the first one, I didn’t get that you like to read. It was to my understanding that you were in love and that person maybe broke your heart in the end. I’m not really feeling that one as much. Also, the way your text is aligned it feels as if there is a bit of a vibration of the text and I don’t think that works in your idea.
ReplyDeleteI like how “read” makes up your background in your second rough, however I’m curious to know it this exceeds your edges. I ask this, because right now, the way it is, it resembles waves a little at the top, and I wonder if maybe that sends a different message than you wish to send. As far as font, I like that you kept it simple, however maybe you could play with the idea that most commonly in books types with serifs are used, and maybe that could help reiterate your reading idea.
I am immediately drawn to the second one. It is more visually interesting and looks like you’re schedule is kind of being submersed in a liquid. However conceptually I like the first one better, just because I relate to having quotes stuck in my head and relating what goes on in my books to circumstances in my day. I’m not sure if that is at all what you’re going for, but even just how you are representing what you do between events in your day is nice rather then just writing “read”. I think you could push this idea further though. Maybe think about a more whimsical font for the quotes. Also layout could be pushed to be more visually interesting. Think about how books are set up: title, preface, table of contents, chapters, index…etc. Think about how a book is physically set up: bound, pages, front cover, back cover. Overall nice ideas!
ReplyDeleteOut of the two, I see the second one as more communicative from a design standpoint.
ReplyDeleteThe first design reads like a list. I like that it is very clean. It reminds me of a table of contents which also follows your concept of the reading all day. Maybe you could make your day a table of contents of your life. That is what I was seeing at first anyway. I see what you were going for but maybe if you do something like housed the quotes inside of the bigger words like the “eat”.
I like the second design is better. It’s a good idea that fits your concept. It shows allot of reading! Maybe you could bold the text some to make an almost black background and do the rest of your type in white. That might look very contrasting. An extra black condensed font might pull the black background off.
With the second comp i get a sense of you drowning or enveloped by what you read. The suggestion to use parts of the book instead of repeating read all the time is a good idea. I get a sense of floating with the schedule in the 2nd one. Use lowercase on your schedule to lighten them up.
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