Okay, so these are definitely roughs, especially the second comp. My idea for this project was to go with more of a day to day feeling rather than a schedule. The first comp represents everything that I feel is slightly out of my reach sometimes so I created the hand trying to reach for all the words. I haven't decided whether or not I am going to fill in the shape of the hand with words and phrases or if I am just going to leave the outline. I am digging the outline thing though. I chose bodoni because I think it looked the best and it has more emotion than helvetica or myriad, ect. but it also isn't too busy. The second comp is pretty far from finished but the idea is to have the brain filled with thoughts, phrases, words, or just random stuff that goes on in my head throughout the day. Each path represents where I would put bigger and bold words and I am also going to fill some of the negative space inside the shape with smaller words, phrases ect. I'm not too sure if I can make this one work properly. The font here is myriad but i'm not sure if I will keep it. I think my biggest issue is figuring out all the tweaks in illustrator and how to use them properly.
Okay, so these are definitely roughs, especially the second comp. My idea for this project was to go with more of a day to day feeling rather than a schedule. The first comp represents everything that I feel is slightly out of my reach sometimes so I created the hand trying to reach for all the words. I haven't decided whether or not I am going to fill in the shape of the hand with words and phrases or if I am just going to leave the outline. I am digging the outline thing though. I chose bodoni because I think it looked the best and it has more emotion than helvetica or myriad, ect. but it also isn't too busy. The second comp is pretty far from finished but the idea is to have the brain filled with thoughts, phrases, words, or just random stuff that goes on in my head throughout the day. Each path represents where I would put bigger and bold words and I am also going to fill some of the negative space inside the shape with smaller words, phrases ect. I'm not too sure if I can make this one work properly. The font here is myriad but i'm not sure if I will keep it. I think my biggest issue is figuring out all the tweaks in illustrator and how to use them properly.
The first rough is my favorite. I think because it’s a little easier to relate to. That could be because there are not enough words or phrases in the second rough. I think the hand looks great without text inside but I would just try out filling in with text. Also have you thought of rearranging the location of the hand? Instead of reach down why not reach up? So the hand in the bottom right and the things out of reach in the top left corner. For me, when I think of things out reach I think over my head or above me. As for the brain, I think I would use Helvetica because you have a lot of different options as far as style. You could create some really neat texture with the text. The outline is great though. I also really like your concept with the day to day feelings because I connected with those same exact feelings and I think everyone else can too.
ReplyDeleteI definitely would go with your first composition. I think the second is a good idea, but I think with all the text you would loose the composition; the viewer would not be able to see the image of the brain. With your first composition, I would keep the arm in the outline form, I like the negative space, just tweak the shape to make it smoother, there is a bump in the wrist that is distracting. The arrangement of the text at the bottom looks right. I like how the main ideas are larger just to allow the viewer to get what points you are emphasizing. Instead of writing the word text around the hand, I would write a thought or yours to give more of a story, or to connect it to the bottom portion of the composition. Also, in the pile of words you could try to pile them all the way to the bottom of the corner because right now they look like they are floating in space.
ReplyDeleteThe word "text" on the hand is just a filler for later thoughts. I put that in there to give the general idea of what I am going for.
ReplyDeleteThese are really cool. Creating images out of text is something I like a lot. On the first rough, the idea is clear and very effective. I feel this way a lot too and I also miss my dog. Time is perfect being so large and second to biggest is money. So so true. The hand does not need a filler. You wouldn’t get the hand as much if it was filled-in. I like this one a lot. Probably one of my favorite ones I’ve critiqued. The second idea is also very effective. To show those pink lines (which we can’t use pink but I’m sure you know) put more words and sentences there to give it that ‘brain’ feeling. This idea is creative also but your first one is the one I would definitely go with. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI think both of these ideas are good. I am curious to see what the second design would look like with more work and more words filling the brain.
ReplyDeleteThe first design is very effective I think it works very well. The pile of words on the left look just out of reach from the hand, like everything is at your fingertips but still unattainable. I don’t think you need to change much at all in the first design. I like the arm just being an outline. The variety of size in the pile of words works well, but you could try using the different styles of the font you used as well as the different sizes. I’m curious to see what words you would use to make up the arm.
I think that the second composition would look good when you finish it but I think the concept behind the first design is a lot stronger.
I like the first composition, both in execution and in concept. When I first saw it, however, I saw a baby’s hand and was trying to figure out what that had to do with it. Aside from making the hand look more adult, I would maybe switch the position of the hand and the words, so that the hand is actually reaching up to the text, and it really is just out of reach. In this position, the viewer just thinks that the hand is about to grab it, that it’s within reach and the hand just hasn’t grabbed it yet.
ReplyDeleteOn the second, I really like where you’re going with it. Obviously it’s nowhere close to being finished, but it’s a good concept. Myriad might be a good font, san-serif seems like a good choice at least, but you might try a good serif font to see what you can get out of that. The problem with this one is deciding what to put on the outside of the brain. This is an important decision that could make or break your design.
Melissa, I agree going with your first event thought the brain idea would be nice to see, but keep the outline of the hand just so that the composition isn’t to cluttered or busy. Maybe even add in an element actually keeping those day-to-day items out of your reach. For insistence there stacked on the high shelf of time. Just a suggestion, but it might help.
ReplyDeleteI really like both designs. The hand is the most worked out so far. I really enjoy the concept of things out of reach. I got that from it before I read your explanation. That’s why I think it’s more worked out. I would leave the hand as is, it looks great. The words on the corner work really well too. They might look more dynamic if a couple words are closer to the hand. Maybe those words could be easier things in your life to obtain.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I like the first one and think its closer to finished; the brain is a great idea! I really like this concept. Try leaving it blank with just the curves in the brain outlined, similar to your hand. Another idea is to fill in the rest of the brain with allot smaller type and the curves of the brain composed of larger type. I think you should do both ideas and maybe just choose one to turn in for the project.
Like the hand comp. I agree with the comments saying it looks like a kids hand. Work on that. Bodoni works great for this comp. Keep going.
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