I'm very involved in student media on campus (tv, radio) and video intern at the athletic dept. it seems like it has taken over my life because i'm always busy with something. The roughs are of me being bombarded, sometimes confused,with camera shots, tv scripts, and stress from a producer or my boss. student media is a lot of fun but it is also time consuming and stressful. the dialogue is distorting, crowded and in different sizes gathering around my head and suffocating me with all sorts of instructions and demands. i used gill sans because it flows with the content and the bolder fonts kinda have a show biz feel to it.
The second one seems like a better description of your media work. Especially since it’s a busy, deadline based industry you’re representing the stress and sometimes chaos. The dialogue aspect really helps create that scene for people who aren’t familiar with the background work that goes into production. I’m interpreting the large circle as a head, but it’s very vague and actually seems unnecessary. You accomplish the dizzying amount of work just by text placements and amount of text, so you don’t really need an object as an image. I would suggest using a more consistent type choice and creating emphasis and contrast just through size and weight.
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ReplyDeleteAt first, everything seemed like it was all over the place. But I did realize that the point of the composition was to show how stressful your schedule is. I would actually go with the second composition. I think the face in the composition is a good idea, but I’m not sure you used type to make the face. If you didn’t, I highly recommend trying to use certain types and glyphs to make the head and neck outline a little more noticeable. But I don’t think you need to worry about making a face; it seems that would distract too much from the actual project. It would be really interesting if the phrases encroached on the “person” a little more. As the phrases move farther away from the person they could become denser and finally unreadable towards the edge of the composition piece. But that’s only a suggestion. It’s looking really good so far!
Wow. I thought my schedule was hectic. Not at all compared to this. I like this a lot because reading this made me feel all over the place. I wasn’t sure where to start. I didn’t know if I should go for the bold or the circle/head part. This is a good thing though because this is probably how you feel doing this. Under all this stress though, reading some of these short dialogues is pretty comical. It brings the humor out of something that would make me angry and I think that’s very creative. With the head though, I’m not sure why you chose those words inside of it. Maybe explaining more on why you put them in there would give the viewer an idea of why they’re there. I like this idea a lot. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThe compositions are the same ideas but I think the second composition is more effective than the first. I’m confused in the first one why there are phrases out to the side and everything else is crammed onto the right side. I think the second design shows more chaos but the sections of type should be more jumbled together. I think they’re too separated at the moment, with too much space around each part. You explained that your days are hectic but it looks too structured where the lines line up and there is a lot of white space that could be filled. I think the image of the head in the second design looks more like a head than the first one. I would also like to see more variety in the sizes and styles of the fonts. Too many of the phrases are the same size and style.
ReplyDeleteOkay, lots of things here. I don’t understand what the drawing is supposed to be, and you can’t even use line anyway. It looks like you have several different fonts (also not kosher), although if you don’t then disregard this sentence. You have several grammar and spelling errors. You did a great job on making your schedule very hectic, which is what you were going for. You just need to make it more legible and put it in a more understandable layout. Everything seems like it’s in a spot for a reason, but I can’t figure out why anything is where it is. The first one has more of a shape, maybe it’s a film projector, but the lens is way too long. The second one is nothing to me. You really have a lot of work to do on these. Just think about your concept more and find a way to pull it all together.
ReplyDeleteWork on the figure! It's not easy to follow. You mentioned using a TV instead. Probably a better idea. Make sure all the text is up at the edge of it to make the form and surround it.
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