For my project I decided to illustrate my day by showing the applications I use on a daily basis. I work as a graphic designer on campus and as a freelancer from home. My day is constantly taken up by work and projects. Within the Photoshop, Illustrator, and InDesign icons, I've placed the names of a few works I've done using the specific program. Also the projects are aligned with the type of work it was made as. For example, Please Understand me and Bobcat Build are Posters, so they are aligned with the word posters. Ray C, Jon Wain, Lava Lounge are myspace pages I have created, so they are aligned with the word layouts, and so on. I choose to use Myriad because it was the closes to the icon letters. I've also made the icons different sizes to show which ones I use more then others.
In this rough I added words outside of the programs. The words at the top right are representative of my daily schedule. They show how the programs are used for the most part of my day. The words to the bottom left are representative of other factors in my life that interfere or intertwine with my daily schedule.
For my last rough, I took a different approach. In this rough I decided to express my daily schedule as a tight stressed day. Something similar to a press that is constantly cramming so much into a small, compact package. So within this image is a run though of my Thursdays. The larger words are the main things my day revolves around.
My favorite out of the three is the third one. The other two I don’t feel like they are a daily schedule, more of a story of your life (as having to do with your work). I would maybe choose different words instead of Thursday. Because it makes it feel like two different Thursdays (like a week of stress instead of a day) but if it is a week never mind. Maybe the time you wake up and the time you go to sleep? 8am 11pm or whatever? In the mass of words BMU stands out as the most prominent. I don’t know what it stands for, so if you want this to be your focal point great, but if not I would thin the font some. The Thursday (or whatever you choose to be there) should be able to be read from the same angle instead of 2 different directions.
ReplyDeleteComp 1: It is interesting and fun to look at. I like your choice of type and the way it is layed out. The way that you layed it out on a black square and had part of it going off the edge works really well to add a different dimension to the comp.
ReplyDeleteComp 2: It is better than comp 1. The added text on the outside of the squares help fill up some more of that negative space. I like the way all the text is rotated in a different direction. That helps the eye travel all around the picture plane and see all of the comp easily. I like it a lot.
Comp 3: This one is my favorite though. If I were you, I’d pursue this one as the final. The whole idea of a press that is crushing down on you and the stress of your day works really well. Good use of parenthesis and glyphs to accent your work. Great job.
Out of the first two roughs (AI, PS., ID) I like the bottom one better. I like how busy it is and it portrays the chaos in you daily routine. It also ties the words in and out of the box together. I think this is a well designed and well though out concept. This only thing you may want to conceder is the weight between the upper right corner and the bottom left corner. I like how the bottom left corner goes all the way to edge and I wish that the opposite corner would do the same.
ReplyDeleteOn the last rough I really like how constrained everything is. It relates well to the concept of being crammed. I think that if you played with the line weights and type sizes more, you could really make it even more dramatic. There are to “work more work” right on top of each other and it my eye is really drawn to that area. Try writing it all out in one line, or playing with sizes. You could also place that phrase to center and surround it with all of the little things that you are working on. You could also let the words squish out the sides to imply the compression. Over all well done.
Hey Markel!
ReplyDeleteAll three drafts are very well rendered. Your first one is too simple and does not express your actual daily schedule, it seems like the emphasis are more on the programs and not so much on you.
Your second draft and third are more adapted to your schedule. I like that you added your “waking up, classes, work, and sleep” I think it adds more of your individuality to it. It may be a little busy.
In your third draft I get the feeling of stress and chaos all crammed into one day. Maybe vary the sizes of the words a little bit more to make it feel more crammed. Also overlapping the words more may make it feel more crazy. I think if you work on the third one a little bit more it could be your final piece. I like the brackets and “thurs” being inside of them.
I am very intrigued by the first one. When I saw it I thought it was a very interesting composition, I understood right away what the images were and what they were representing. I like how you placed all the works you have done inside the boxes marked as Photoshop, illustrator and indesign. It is interesting to look within the black boxes and see what you have achieved. I think the concept may not follow your daily schedule, but I think the idea is more interesting than just a regular day.
ReplyDeleteI think the second one good as well, although I think the page is too busy with words. I look at it and I am not too sure what to read first. You may have done this on purpose to show how hectic it is, but I am just confused when I first look at it. I think the first one has a better layout and is clearer
The last one is a good idea. I understand the brackets right away when I first looked at it as being crammed, and how you have a busy day. I like how you showed which day it is also. It makes it more real and relatable. The words within the brackets are crazy and scattered. I like the point you are trying to get across, but I think it is just had to read. Some of the words blend together as one sentence that maybe are not supposed to blend together.
In my opinion, you should go with the first or second one. It’s strange, because when I first looked at your first one, I really liked it and thought it was near perfect as it was. Then I looked at your second one, and all of the sudden the first seemed empty and void. I don’t know which works better, so I’d say just go with preference.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea. It’s a very creative way of addressing the assignment. I think the icons look superb, and the font is perfect for it (literally).
As for the third…
I feel like it just doesn’t stack up. It’s not that it’s bad; it’s just that the two above are that much better. Basically what I’m trying to say is, your first two are probably my favorites of all of the postings on the blog.
I officially give you the Golden Metal of Mark’s Approval. Enjoy it, friend.
I’m feeling all of these, but more so the last two. I like the introduction of your actual schedule, it adds to the project. However, I think the white space could be worked a little more, it seems a little too broken at the moment. I like the diagonal created by the programs, but have you tried any other spreads? I would run a few roughs with them in different locations on the canvas. Such as in a Dock or in some other arrangement. Just a thought.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite is the last one about your stressful day. Try to build more tension in the words, I would work on the weight of words based on the location in the vice..
Something like:
Light
Medium
Heavy
Medium
Light
That way you can really see the break of the vice. That and also the position of the actual words themselves inside the vice. Maybe the more stressful things towards the center. Very nice though, I can’t wait to see the finals.
Markel,
ReplyDeleteI like all of three of your compositions and they all seem to together. I like the second one more out of the first two simply because you give a little more information on the outside, and I really enjoy the boldness of the letters. It looks like you spent a lot of time making these line up just right and I think it works well. The fact that the boxes go out of the border is very intriguing and makes me want to see more.
I like the third composition the most however because I think it is much more personal. The first two are visually nice to look at; however they are focused more so on one aspect of your day, whereas the third really tells us what you do all throughout the day. I really enjoy the boldness of the outlining composition; it really draws the viewer in. I also really enjoy the variation in the size and thickness of the words you have inside your brackets, it gives it a sense of space and depth. I think it is easy to understand and very relatable.
Although I like all of your compositions, I think you should go with your third idea for sure, it is just much more personal, and gives more of a daily schedule rather than just one aspect of your day
I'm leaning toward the 1st one. The 2nd one becomes too busy with the extra words and you lose the boxes. Some people were concerned that you don't express a day but more your life you could always resolve that by making your schedule simple like..."wake, design, sleep" and place it near the squares.
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